singing4ever45
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|  | FIRST SONG EVER PLEASE READ!!!!
« Thread Started on Oct 16, 2009, 8:58pm » | |
Okay, so I'm not much of a songwriter but I've realized it's easier to start a career in music if you're a songwriter. So I took a while to write this song, and it's not that good. All I'm asking is for feedback and advice. If you don't like the song, please don't tell me directly! Thanks. P.s- it doesn't even rhyme yet 
Take My Hand
When I look at you, my heart goes racing
I just wanna chase after you
You make me feel faint and
My heart just aches for yours
When I leave your sights, I feel outside of myself
Chorus: So take my hand, tell me you love me because I love you and I need you to see you're the boy I need Your smle makes me flash a grin take my hand, grip it tight, keep me warm. Take my hand.
Sparks fly in a touch, a kiss, a brush of hands let the sparks fly let nature take its course Don't push me away pull me to you. Hold me tight. You'll know that we're meant to be.
Chorus
Make me feel all the feelings that I have for you Take my hand, feel for me the way I do for you.
So take my hand, tell me you love me. I know that you love me I can see it in your eyes that I'm the girl for you. My smile makes you flash a grin I'll take your hand, I'll grip it tight, I'll keep it warm.
Take my hand
Take my hand
Oh, take my hand
Take...my...hand
This song was all of my feelings for this guy shoved into a song. I'm not finished sorting it all out. I don't even know what genre of music it is.
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